You cover a lot of points and there is always a sense of your voice and argument in your work.
You do well to reference how many cinema's the film was available at BUT try and keep all your 3D points together. You also do well to include some or Mark Kermode's arguments in your essay, this would have been the perfect time to include your American film.
Rather than saying 'bad reputation' use the phrase 'poor critical reaction'.
Your Iron Man section is a lot stronger because you have more facts to support your points. To improve the Iron Man section you could have included key terms for audience types (see my blog for examples). Likewise just mention that Iron Man was 4 quadrant rather than it appealing to a bigger audience.
You begin to show your understanding of the industry when you mention the influence and impact of being a big six (though you don't use the term big six).
Overall this is an encouraging start. There are a few issues with structure we need to work on BUT the big ficus is terminology and vocabulary. These little tweaks will result in a big shift in your grade.
Matt
ReplyDeleteYou cover a lot of points and there is always a sense of your voice and argument in your work.
You do well to reference how many cinema's the film was available at BUT try and keep all your 3D points together. You also do well to include some or Mark Kermode's arguments in your essay, this would have been the perfect time to include your American film.
Rather than saying 'bad reputation' use the phrase 'poor critical reaction'.
Your Iron Man section is a lot stronger because you have more facts to support your points. To improve the Iron Man section you could have included key terms for audience types (see my blog for examples). Likewise just mention that Iron Man was 4 quadrant rather than it appealing to a bigger audience.
You begin to show your understanding of the industry when you mention the influence and impact of being a big six (though you don't use the term big six).
Overall this is an encouraging start. There are a few issues with structure we need to work on BUT the big ficus is terminology and vocabulary. These little tweaks will result in a big shift in your grade.
Argument 12/25
Examples 11/25
23/50 E+